An interesting introduction to the frame story, especially with the way that it's presented with images of different applications!
However (and I hope that it's okay for me to say this), I did find it rough trying to understand what this was at first, and I don't think I would have understood it without having read the blurb in the table of contents - unless if I missed something between this and "Welcome to Marredbury Part 2"?
This is very okay to say! This is why I am sharing. I want the feedback. Thank you for taking the time to read and give it some thought.
I can understand where getting acclimated and understanding what's going on would be difficult with how it is presented now. I'll have to play with how I can slip in a bit more exposition in this first stream
An interesting introduction to the frame story, especially with the way that it's presented with images of different applications!
However (and I hope that it's okay for me to say this), I did find it rough trying to understand what this was at first, and I don't think I would have understood it without having read the blurb in the table of contents - unless if I missed something between this and "Welcome to Marredbury Part 2"?
This is very okay to say! This is why I am sharing. I want the feedback. Thank you for taking the time to read and give it some thought.
I can understand where getting acclimated and understanding what's going on would be difficult with how it is presented now. I'll have to play with how I can slip in a bit more exposition in this first stream
Oooh, yeah, trying to find the right point to slip in the right amount of exposition can be tough...
Good luck!
Thanks haha